Working Name of the Piece: A Letter To My Parents
1. This piece is at the revision stage of writing.
2. The main idea I was trying to express is how hard understanding love and acceptance is when the two are at odds, and how complicated the way I feel about my parents is. I hope the poem makes sense to others, but my main goal with it was to work through my own emotions.
3. The area I am having difficulty with is all of the metaphors and similies and rhymes that make a poem a poem. I don't think what I've written could be called anything other than a poem, but it was mostly me writing down thoughts as they came to me and using the hyperlinks to follow trains of thought wherever they lead.
4. I have tried to remedy this problem by going over the peice after I'd written it and looking for areas I could add rhymes/metaphors/make the poem feel more... poem-y.
5. I would especially like you to notice the way I used the hyperlinks within this piece. I wasn't able to accomplish my original goal of having every single poem link to at least one other poem, like a tangled web that has no definitve ending, but I'm quite happy with the way the poem works right now and despite the topic it was really fun to write. Also I learned basic html just for this so like. Please notice it <3
6. Other things I think you should know when you look at this piece include:
7. Do you want your instructor to comment on other areas that are strengths and weakness? Yes